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Augray
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 Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 7:35 am Post subject: Re: Request for criticism of 6 POTM layups/editing/titles |
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On Tue, 1 Jul 2008 16:58:16 -0700 (PDT), Friar Broccoli
<EliasRK@gmail.com> wrote in
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Well, regarding March 2007 (
http://www.talkorigins.org/origins/postmonth/2007_03.html )
Epidendrosaurus wasn't an early bird. |
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r norman
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| Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 7:38 am Post subject: Re: Request for criticism of 6 POTM layups/editing/titles |
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On Tue, 1 Jul 2008 16:58:16 -0700 (PDT), Friar Broccoli
<EliasRK@gmail.com> wrote:
If the spalling gets too extreme, I suggest you glue the piece back
together again. |
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Shane
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| Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 9:01 am Post subject: Re: Request for criticism of 6 POTM layups/editing/titles |
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On Tue, 1 Jul 2008 16:58:16 -0700 (PDT), Friar Broccoli
wrote:
Looks fine to me. My only criticism is that you should seek
critiques rather than criticisms.
Thanks for doing all this work. |
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Friar Broccoli
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| Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 9:23 am Post subject: Re: Request for criticism of 6 POTM layups/editing/titles |
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On Jul 1, 10:35 pm, Augray <aug...@sympatico.ca> wrote:
Would you suggest wording that is correct but gets the
message across. Is it an "early ancestor" to birds?
Thanks very much |
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John Wilkins
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| Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 10:52 am Post subject: Re: Request for criticism of 6 POTM layups/editing/titles |
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Friar Broccoli <EliasRK@gmail.com> wrote:
All PotMs should be written by me, so if you don't have one of mine
winning, just find the best of my posts for that Month and substitute
it.
HTH. HAND.
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John S. Wilkins, Postdoctoral Research Fellow, Philosophy
University of Queensland - Blog: scienceblogs.com/evolvingthoughts
"He used... sarcasm. He knew all the tricks, dramatic irony, metaphor,
bathos, puns, parody, litotes and... satire. He was vicious." |
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John Wilkins
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| Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 11:01 am Post subject: Re: Request for criticism of 6 POTM layups/editing/titles |
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Augray <augray@sympatico.ca> wrote:
So it didn't get the worm?
--
John S. Wilkins, Postdoctoral Research Fellow, Philosophy
University of Queensland - Blog: scienceblogs.com/evolvingthoughts
"He used... sarcasm. He knew all the tricks, dramatic irony, metaphor,
bathos, puns, parody, litotes and... satire. He was vicious." |
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Friar Broccoli
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| Posted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 10:34 am Post subject: Re: Request for criticism of 6 POTM layups/editing/titles |
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On Jul 2, 10:37 am, Augray <aug...@sympatico.ca> wrote:
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On Wed, 2 Jul 2008 02:23:10 -0700 (PDT), Friar Broccoli
Elia...@gmail.com> wrote in
143e8d6b-d0ca-4508-823e-0fed26ee8...@25g2000hsx.googlegroups.com> :
On Jul 1, 10:35 pm, Augray <aug...@sympatico.ca> wrote:
On Tue, 1 Jul 2008 16:58:16 -0700 (PDT), Friar Broccoli
Elia...@gmail.com> wrote in
7d4e7833-772c-42a7-b3b9-cae347a12...@z72g2000hsb.googlegroups.com> :
From here:
http://www.talkorigins.org/origins/postmonth/2007.html
I need criticism on February, March, April, and May.
From here:
http://www.talkorigins.org/origins/postmonth/2008.html
on April, and May.
I will be grateful for comments/criticisms on layup, editing
titles, spalling or anything else you believe I should change.
Well, regarding March 2007 (http://www.talkorigins.org/origins/postmonth/2007_03.html)
Epidendrosaurus wasn't an early bird.
Would you suggest wording that is correct but gets the
message across. Is it an "early ancestor" to birds?
I'd suggest "extinct reptile", because I wouldn't want to create a
perception of bias before the reader gets to the classification bit.
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Since I want to be clear would "early winged reptile" be an
acceptable compromise?
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Also, I'm puzzled as to why you're using tinyurl near the top of the
page when you could just use the groups.google.com URL. I'd suggest
something like:
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JTEM then pointed to <a
href="http://groups.google.com/group/talk.origins/msg/28813dcf085a3f60?dmod..."
target="_blank">one of his previous messages</a> which included the
following:
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I used that tinyurl because it was the same one JTEM used.
Since he felt there was some reason for prefering that mode
and it didn't affect the clarity of the message I left it unchanged.
If I make changes I need to be able to justify them.
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But then, a) I may not be aware of all of the circumstances
surrounding your choice, and
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b) you're in charge.
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Scratch that, I'm married. |
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June
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| Posted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 11:00 am Post subject: Re: Request for criticism of 6 POTM layups/editing/titles |
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Friar Broccoli <EliasRK@gmail.com> wrote:
These look fine to me. I didn't notice any typos or anything. I like the
way you've formatted them so that it is clear who is making each
statement.
Same as above
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I will be grateful for comments/criticisms on layup, editing
titles, spalling or anything else you believe I should change.
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HTH, HAND
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My 2¢ ß-}
June
To email me replace 'go' with 'ville' and remove the .spam.jam |
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